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Do you think business should hire employees who will spend their entire lives working for the same company ?Explain why do you agree or disagree use specific reasons and details to support your answer

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Some
people
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 think that working in the same
company
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 for their entire lives could be beneficial and
this
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 practice should be employed by
businesses
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 when hiring new employees.
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, I do not support
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 idea, because of two main reasons. First of all, not all workers have the ambitions or are willing to
work
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 for the same
company
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 for a lifetime period.
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if not more important, it is going to be more difficult for the business to grow, because the same
people
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 will lack new
ideas
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 to employ. At
first,
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there was the concept of working in a
company
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 for most of your life, just to have the possibility to get a promotion inside the same
company
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, meanwhile, young
people
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 do not have
this
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 mentality. For them is not important that the
job
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 they are doing is a
well-payed
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job
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, what
interest
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interests
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 them is that they have to like the
job
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 if they do not, they are going to a new one.
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, if
businesses
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 start to hire
people
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 with a long perspective in mind, they can find
people
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 resigning after a certain amount of time
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 because they do not have any interest in pursuing that kind of
job
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.
For example
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, there are many cases of
people
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, who start to
work
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 for an important
company
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,
such
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 as Amazon, where at first they enjoy the working atmosphere, but
then
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 they simply change their mind and decide to do
work
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 for another
company
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 or change completely their
job
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. Young
people
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 try to
make
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 as much
work
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 experience as possible,
for example
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, they can
work
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 as a waitress, hairstylist, or cashier.., just with the aim of understanding what is better for them and what they are most suited for. The second main reason is that it is not profitable for the business itself to hire
people
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 for a lifetime
job
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 because
this
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 can create obstacles in the idea process. If a business needs new technologies and innovation to compete in the global market, it needs different and various
people
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 from different fields to
work
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 with them and change them for whatever purpose they are needed.
For example
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, if Amazon wants to launch a new campaign to attract clients, there is the need to have more
ideas
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, and in an environment with
people
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 that worked together for many many years, is really difficult to always come out with something different.
That is
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 why, today we see a lot of companies or start-ups formed by young
people
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 who can add a variety of
ideas
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 to the projects. They have different points of view compared to the ones
that
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 worked for the same
company
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 for 50 years of their lives. In conclusion, I disagree with the fact that
businesses
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 should hire
people
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 to
work
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 with them for their entire lives, because, on the one hand, young
people
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 do not have a mentality that could make them
work
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 for the same
company
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 all those years, they are more into doing a variety of jobs in order to find what is best for them.
On the other hand
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, it is not even an advantage for
businesses
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 to always
work
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 with the same
people
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, which is going
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instead
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to cause more difficulties when it comes to coming up with new
ideas
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.
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