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Climate change is now an accepted threat to our planet, but there is not enough political action to control excessive consumerism and pollution. Do you agree?

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Today, a lot of development going on all over nature one of them is nature's change and & is extremely harmful to all humankind. Global warming, drought, flood and cyclone these of a lot of humidity development. In these ,situations part of society is poor to live.
This
 sensitive issue that earth leaders are facing and trying to resolve. These humidity revolutions have many side effects which are direct and indirectly harmful to the world.
To begin
 with, in the world population increase in every second. Now seven billion population on Earth. Most humans think temperature can not change. Because I think a lot of humidity change reason is human activities. Many nations recording extreme weather conditions,
such
 as the sea levels are rising and Sea temperatures are increasing more rapidly than before. In these ,situations community is not involved directly. It is indirect that people are responsible for
this
. These days the main topic is global warming. Why? it is the main major of pollution. In my ,opinion the government has not given the best solution to global warming. These rules are give published for a temporary time.
However
, we can control if all the nature leaders come together and come to a consensus. I think it is the best way to decrease these situations. The time for action is definitely now. Each year of delays and ineffective policy will make it harder to restore the health of planet Earth.
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