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The table gives information about woman joblessness in four countries of the UK.

The table gives information about woman joblessness in four countries of the UK.
The table gives information about
woman
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woman's
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 joblessness in four countries of the UK. As can be seen from the
graph
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 the green column
percentage
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 of 2013 and the blue one is for 2014. The
graph
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 shows that the highest unemployment
rates
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rate
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 in England
at
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in
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 2013 its 6.8% and the lowest is in
the
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apply
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wales
5.4
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%. In 2014 the
graph
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 illustrates that the highest female underemployed
percentage
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 is in
Scotland
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 6.7%, and the lowest is in northern Ireland 4.6%.The number of women
joblessness
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 was gradually decreasing expect
Scotland
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. From the statistics it can be inferred that in 2014
percentage
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 is gradually fell compared to 2013. In
Scotland
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percentage
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the percentage
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moderately
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was moderately
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 up by 0.6%
while
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 the rest fell on average by 0,3%-1%. Overview
the
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of the
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graph
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 we can understand that in
Scotland
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 and England jobless is more popular than in Wales and Northern Ireland.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, percentage, scotland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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