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The table below gives information about the population of New Zealand between 2011 and 2012

The table below gives information about the population of New Zealand between 2011 and 2012
The table shows data about the number of
people
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 in four categories in New
Zealand
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 in two particular years: 2011 and 2012.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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although
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 there was a downward trend, the
population
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 of
people
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 aged between 15 and 39 were highest in both 2011 and 2012.
In addition
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, the
figure
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 for
people
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 in 40-64 and 65+ groups and the total
population
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 in New
Zealand
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 showed an upward trend,
whereas
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 the number of the other two categories presented an opposite pattern. In 2011, the
figure
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 for
people
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 aged between 15 and 39 stood at 1520000 which was the largest group in New
Zealand
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 and
then
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 decreased to 1500000 in 2012 with a decrease
rate
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 of -0.2%. The same decline
rate
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 was seen for
people
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 aged under 15, the
figure
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 for it fell from 801750 in 2011 to 80000 in 2012. The total
population
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 in New
Zealand
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 showed a slight increase
rate
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 (+0.6%), growing from 4400000 in 2011 to 4460000 in 2012. The
population
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 of
people
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 aged over 40 rose between 2011 and 2012, and it was particularly noticeable for
people
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 over 65 with an increased
rate
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 of +4.0%, which was much higher than that of the 40-64 group (-0.6%). The number of the second largest group,
people
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 aged between 40 and 64, rose from 1400000 in 2011 to 1460000 in 2012,
while
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 the
figure
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 for
people
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 over 65 dramatically rose from 500000 to 900000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, zealand, population, figure, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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