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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Other prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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supposing that the suitable
place
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 for
people
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 to reside in is
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city
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a city
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.
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,
other
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others
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 still hold their reckon that the countryside should be the best answer. Each
place
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 offers its own benefits and drawbacks and the following essay will discuss them in detail. From the
overall
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 view, it is easy to see that
people
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 prefer to live in the central
city
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 because of its various benefit. In the
city
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, there are many facilities for
citizen
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citizens
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 to choose
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 as shopping
mall
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malls
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,
university
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universities
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,
theater
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theaters
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,
cinema
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cinemas
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,
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and
hospital
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hospitals
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 it would not be difficult for the
city
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’s residents in finding education centres,
foods
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food
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 or
entertainments
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entertainment
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.
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, Cities offer more job opportunities as most of the companies and industries are situated there.
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, living in the
city
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 has some negative sides as well. The common drawback
are
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 high property of crime and air pollution.
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, some
people
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 decide to leave out the
city
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.
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, some
people
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 think that the best
place
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 to live is in
the
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 rural area. It is believed that
people
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 who live in these areas have a healthier life because they breathe fresher air, they eat natural fruits and vegetables and they live in a more relaxed and
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quiet
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 environment. Because of its benefit, their
expantancy
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expectancy
 is higher than
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others
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.
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 it
bring
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 most of
benefit
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 to it, there are
stil
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still
have
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drawback
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. the
people
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in
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here have
less
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 opportunities to prefer the offer. In conclusion,
i
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 think that
depend
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 on age, we should live in
the
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 suitable
place
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 to reside in.
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