The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your ownknowledge or experience.

Some
people
argue that
science
should
necessary
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in our
lives
. because that provides more convenience and comfortable in our
lives
. I strongly believe that tech development will enhance our lifestyle.
However
,
science
development is not useful in our
lives
always.
For instance
, cameras had big lenses in the past. But, recently days,
people
invented the very very small lens. The size is that can
into
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the smartphone. If the lens will hide in the room, we couldn't find the lens.
As a result
, the camera-using criminal was many happen
the
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past.
That is
science
's negative effect.
Therefore
, almost
science
development is more useful in our
lives
.
For example
,
past
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cell-phone had only to call function. But, nowadays, the phone changed to
smartphone
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a smartphone
the smartphone
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.
As a result
,
people
use the internet everywhere and anytime without
laptop
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or PC.
Moreover
, it does not connect lan cable, that uses wireless.
Also
,
people
invented the elevator, and after that,
people
can to built tall apartments and buildings.
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provided many houses more than before the invention.
Also
,
people
invented light. After that, a lot of
people
can be spent at night time cush like can read the book at night, because they have the lights. The mentioned above, a number of
science
is helping to enhance
people
's
lives
. But, if
science
will use to crime. that would not enhance
people
's
lives
. We try to use
science
for good things.
then
,
science
will be very useful in our
lives
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enhance
  • medical advancements
  • quality of life
  • technological innovations
  • vaccinations
  • antibiotics
  • convenient
  • fundamental questions
  • ethical dilemmas
  • environmental sustainability
  • paramount
  • healthcare
  • sustainable development
  • artificial intelligence
  • genetic engineering
  • exploration
  • alternative energy sources
  • research & development
  • biotechnology
  • knowledge acquisition
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