Ordinary people try copy famous persons either watching the t.v or reading magazines.reasons of doing this . Do u think it is good or bad?

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socail
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social
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the life of the most famous
people
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ordinary
people
fouce
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copy them either
watching
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the tv or reading magazines. In
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will shed
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light on the reasons
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issue and draw my personal opinion. I totally believe that there are several reasons that are leading
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try
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copy famous
persons
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. The first reason is what
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showing
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in
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social media.
People
consider
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life of them and how they are more comfortable and rich and try to be like them.
For instance
, the person wants to be like the body of
this
famous person and he will
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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