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Some people think children should attend extra classes after the school, while other disagree. Discuss both opinions and give your own view.

#people #children #classes #school
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There is cut-throat competition in today's world. Everyone wants his
child
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 to be extraordinarily intelligent. So, they send their children to extra
classes
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. But I believe if your
child
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 lacks in
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, let him spend his time in some other activities. In
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, a few people think children should attend extra
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 after school because in
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 the tutor explains the topics briefly and eradicates the problems of a
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 that he did not understand in the class.
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, by attending extra
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 a
child
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 can utilize his time to study
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 of watching TV etc. Some students are not good at
studies
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 so they need extra
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 to mitigate their problems.
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, some people believe that extra class is a burden on a
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 because extra homework is
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. So he has to do extra work as compared to other students. And if a
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 is good at
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,
then
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 he can utilize his time in some other extra indoor and outdoor curriculum activities.
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 if the financial condition of parents is not good
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 it is not possible to spend extra money on
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. In my opinion, I assert that if a
child
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 is poor at
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 and requires extra help
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otherwise
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 for brilliant students.
To sum up
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, children should attend the extra
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 only if they are unable to understand the topic in school and are financially strong.
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 extra
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 are not as important to attend.
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