TCultural tourism, in which people travel in order to visit museums, monuments and archaeological sites among other things, is a growing industry. Having so many visitors may sometimes benefit a nation's cultural heritage, but it can also cause problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The trend of people visiting across the globe to explore religious and traditional places is

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drastically. Despite having tourists come to

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places benefits a country's traditional values, there is an opinion that it can be harmful too. I strongly agree with

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argument and believe that too much crowd can hinder the experience of individuals and some inappropriate actions can lead to the damage of the artefacts. To commence, a huge mass of people can be an obstacle for the section of the crowd who are intrigued by the art demonstrated on these sites.

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, it deviates their concentration from the attractive details illustrated by the sculptors, paintings and some historical objects.

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, an artist exploring the beauty of the craft and walls of the museum would be coerced to lose focus on the attractions

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, would have to go across the place at an increased pace.

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, a large gathering wouldn't allow a smooth transaction, in order to have a better experience of the cultural areas which can disappoint the tourists.

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, youngsters can be insensible toward the objects belonging to the cultural sites.

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, there can be irreversible damage to the valuable items that have historic and religious significance.

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, there is proof of teenagers scribbling names on the walls, staircases and some paintings on the prominent monuments of Kathmandu.

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it may be an unintentional approach, it hurts the sentiments of the people who are attached to these platforms.

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, there is clear evidence to support the argument that tourists have a negative impact on places that are of utmost importance regardless of their contribution. The massive gathering and disrespectful activities incline them towards the problematic side.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 7.0

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