In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. (Write at least 250 words).

Recently,

both

parents

going out for work is a tremendous necessity for many families to face a competitive world.

While

some say that

this

family’s children

having

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advantages as they get additional income to

support

their educational and personal needs, others argue that

this

children

is

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lack

of

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support

by the absence of the

parents

which

cause

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causes

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the character buildings’ disturbance.

To begin

with, having additional income through

both

parents

working is beneficial for the kids as they will have better

opportunity

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opportunities

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to be fully supported for their educational and personal needs.

For example

, these youngsters can go to

best

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the best

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school with

the

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great facilities and curriculum wherever they want.

Furthermore

, they

also

will be granted for their

willingnes

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willingness

as all the things they want

such

as toys,

entertainments

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entertainment

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and

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etc. will be easily provided by their

parents

who go out to work.

On the other hand

, less

support

through the absence of

both

parents

go

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going

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out for working may impact

childrens

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children's

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character

buildings

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building

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as they can be less educated

as well as

become more

introvert

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introverted

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.

For instance

, these kids will be naughty and disrespectful to their

surrounding

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surroundings

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as they are not well educated personally by

both

busy

parents

.

Moreover

, the

lonelyness

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loneliness

that

this

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these

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youngsters experience daily is

other

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another

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factor which

lead

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leads

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them to become less interactive as they

are

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trully become

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trully

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truly

become more

introvert

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introverted

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. In conclusion, facing the competitive world by

go

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going

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out for

working

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work

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is not always a bad

things

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thing

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as it will benefit for fulfilling their educational and personal needs.

Although

lack

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the lack

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support

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of support

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caused by the

parents

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parent's

parents'

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absence will lead to

disturd

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disturb

disturbed

children

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children's

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character

buildings

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building

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, it will

also

guide them to be more independent

for

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in

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managing their daily.