In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. (Write at least 250 words).
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Recently,
both
parents
going out for work is a tremendous necessity for many families to face a competitive world. While
some say that this
family’s children having
advantages as they get additional income to Wrong verb form
have
support
their educational and personal needs, others argue that this
children is
lack Unnecessary verb
apply
of
Change preposition
apply
support
by the absence of the parents
which cause
the character buildings’ disturbance.
Correct subject-verb agreement
causes
To begin
with, having additional income through both
parents
working is beneficial for the kids as they will have better opportunity
to be fully supported for their educational and personal needs. Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
For example
, these youngsters can go to best
school with Correct article usage
the best
the
great facilities and curriculum wherever they want. Correct article usage
apply
Furthermore
, they also
will be granted for their willingnes
as all the things they want Correct your spelling
willingness
such
as toys, entertainments
Fix the agreement mistake
entertainment
and
etc. will be easily provided by their Correct word choice
apply
parents
who go out to work.
On the other hand
, less support
through the absence of both
parents
go
out for working may impact Wrong verb form
going
childrens
character Change to a genitive case
children's
buildings
as they can be less educated Fix the agreement mistake
building
as well as
become more introvert
. Replace the word
introverted
For instance
, these kids will be naughty and disrespectful to their surrounding
as they are not well educated personally by Fix the agreement mistake
surroundings
both
busy parents
. Moreover
, the lonelyness
that Correct your spelling
loneliness
this
youngsters experience daily is Correct pronoun usage
these
other
factor which Change the wording
another
lead
them to become less interactive as they Change the verb form
leads
are
Change to the active voice
trully become
have trully become
trully
become more Correct your spelling
truly
introvert
.
In conclusion, facing the competitive world by Replace the word
introverted
go
out for Change the form of the verb
going
working
is not always a bad Replace the word
work
things
as it will benefit for fulfilling their educational and personal needs. Correct the article-noun agreement
thing
Although
lack
Correct article usage
the lack
support
caused by the Change preposition
of support
parents
absence will lead to Change to a genitive case
parent's
parents'
disturd
Correct your spelling
disturb
disturbed
children
character Change noun form
children's
buildings
, it will Fix the agreement mistake
building
also
guide them to be more independent for
managing their daily.Change preposition
in
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