The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The line graph depicts the percentage of
population
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the population
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of residents living in urban areas from four different Asian countries between the
year
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years
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1970 to 2020 with the future assumption of the
year
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years
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2030 and 2040.
Overall
, Malaysia is having
highest
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the highest
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percentage of population
till
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the
year
2020 and it is
also
forecasted to be maximum in future.
To begin
with
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Philippines gradually increased
growth
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the growth
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of citizens in the
year
1990 at 50%,
while
, it dramatically sunk in the
year
2020 at 40%,
whereas
in the years 2030 and
2040
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it was predicted to reach
at
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55% respectively.
In addition
, Thailand’s occupants were not consistent and in the
year
2020
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it was only at 25%, even though after two decades it
forecasted
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to be doubled.
On the other hand
, Malaysia
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overtook
Philippines
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the Philippines
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and reach
at
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a
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peak in the
year
2020 at 75% of people living in
this
city,
however
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it was projected to surge more
at
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85% in the years 2030 and 2040 respectively.
Furthermore
, Indonesia
also
overtook
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population growth of
other
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the other
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two cities which are
Philippines
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the Philippines
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and Thailand in the
year
2020 at 50% and assumed to reach
at
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60% in the years 2030 and 2040 respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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