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The table and pie chart below provides information on transport and car use in Edmonton.

The table and pie chart below provides information on transport and car use in Edmonton.
The table and pie chart below provides information on transport and
car
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 use in Edmonton.
Overall
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, the most usable transport in Edmonton is
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car
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a car
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, the most popular reason for people using
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car
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the car
a car
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 in
city
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the city
a city
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 is
commute
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the commute
a commute
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 to work. The most common transport is
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car
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a car
the car
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, it is
forty five
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forty-five
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percent
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per cent
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. Bus and Taxi have the same percentage, it is 10%. LRT is 35
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percent
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per cent
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. The ordinary people’s reason for using
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car
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a car
the car
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 is
commute
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to commute
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 to work, it is as much as 55
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percent
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per cent
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,
while
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 45% use it for business. People who take their children to school in a
car
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 contribute
to
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apply
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40
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percent
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per cent
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.
On the other hand
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, only 15%
travels
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travel
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 by
car
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 for shopping and leisure activities.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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