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Part 1: The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The plans illustrate the changes that will happen to the layout of the
sports
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centre
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 at the present time and how it will be redeveloped in future of a university.
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, Major changes will take place in future plans
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 as, both Outdoor courts will be completely get demolished in order to accommodate several amenities which are included in the plan except there are some facilities which will not be restructured. At present moment, the
sports
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centre
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 consists of a Changing room, Inside Pool which is 25m,
Reception
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 desk, a seating facility and Gym
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 in Future plans, it does include all
these
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 and no changes are planned to renovate these facilities except Gym which will be reconstructed with wider space to accommodate more individuals. Apart from that, the
Sports
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centre
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 will
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 provide a leisure pool on the west side followed by Changing room right at the south of the pool.
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, different shops will be inaugurated
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 as the
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 shop and Cafe right at the entrance of the
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centre
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. As both the Outdoor courts will be demolished more space on the East side will be left which will turn into Studios for Dancing which is not present at the moment.
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, a new
sports
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 hall will be arranged to organise events followed by, in the same area another changing room will be opened.
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