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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Ohters prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #cities #place #ohters #countryside
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The majority of citizens
are
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believe that
cities
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 have much better
accomodation
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accommodation
accommodations
 than
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countryside
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the countryside
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 because of many factors.
This
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 writer's opinion is that
metroplolitans
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metropolitans
metropolitan
 are the place I like to settle down. Both points will be
explaned
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explained
 in the next paragraphs. It is clear to observe that
cities
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 have more advantages than urban places. But the main reason because of cost of living. We can see that
cities
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 have more
develop
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 in finance,
people
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 are far more
inteligent
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intelligent
 and the facilities are modern, convenient. So the
city
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 will provide citizens high cost of living.
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, the kids in
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countryside
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 are contracted awful education and
people
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,
it
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 mean that children who live in the
city
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 will develop their mind much better than
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 in the urban land.
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,
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countryside
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the countryside
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also
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have
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 some benefits.
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 the materials in the
countryside
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 are worse than
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cities
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in cities
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, the atmosphere in the urban land is priceless. In the
city
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,
people
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 live and treat each other fast, unemotionally, it can understand that citizens
are care
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about
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 themselves than other
people
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. What's more,
the
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air pollution is
the
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 problem in the
city
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.
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, the
countryside
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 has
peaceful
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a peaceful
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 atmosphere,
people
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 are friendly and live slowly.
In
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the
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 result,
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countryside
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the countryside
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 still
have
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 some wonderful advantages that
cities
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 do not have. In
the
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conclusion, both views have their own advantages and disadvantages. But
this
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 writer
is believe
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 that
city
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 is the better place to live
due to
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 the convenience and quality
is
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it
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bring
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brings
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 back.
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