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The best way to solve the environment problem is to increase fuel prices. Agree or disagree

#environment #fuel #prices
It would be a splendid idea to peak the fair of the gasoline. I would
disagee
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disagree
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 statement. Since
from
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the past ,till now we are more fond
using
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the
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gasoline and a dramatical increase in
it's
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 price would make a shock in the mind of
people
andso
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and so
 it would be wise to implement
a
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 alternate plan for gasoline reduction .
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example
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 it would be wise to introduce solar ,electric and other vehicles which
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other
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source
as
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 energy for their transport.It is
also
 better to introduce new bunks having charging points ,hydrogen fuel and etc.
Evenafter
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Even after
 doing
this
 we need to normalize
this
 situation for the
people
, doing
this
 we can save the environment and the
people
 from being collapsed . Despite introducing these methods we
also
 need to look into the
source
 of the fuel being produced. Since the e-vehicles run through the battery which is charged by electricity and the production of electricity is by the coal plant ,
nuclear
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 plant .Using these
source
as
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 energy could even increase the supply of electricity ,which indirectly impose the burning of coal and eradication of natural resource.
Also
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 the making of
rawmaterials
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raw materials
 for these products
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still from natural
non renewable
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source
 so rather than diminishing the environmental problem, it could directly or indirectly
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the
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nature.It was even a bias problem in the American
parliment
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parliament
.
To conclude
,a sudden boom in the rate of
the
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fuel will not be a solution
for
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the
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environmental pollution .
Instead
 of making a
drastical
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drastic
 increase
price
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in price
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,we need to keenly look into the cause and find a solution for the
well being
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well-being
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 of both the environment and the
people
.
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