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Some people think citites are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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It is thought that
cities
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 are the best place to live. Meanwhile, there is
an
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opposition that living in the
countryside
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 is better. In my point of view, living in the
cities
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 has more opportunities to get
a quality jobs
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a quality job
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 and there are
also
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 a lot of
services
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 that are convenient for
people
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 to live.
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,
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countryside
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the countryside
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 is an ideal environment to live comfortably without pressure, it has less modern facilities and
services
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 as well. Living in the
cities
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 has more opportunities to get a quality job or a job with
high
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a high
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 salary,
people
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 can easily become successful and get have a wealthy
life
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 in the future. Not only that,
citites
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cities
 provide
people
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 with many
services
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 which are food delivery and technology taxi which helps
people
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 to be more convenient in travelling.
In
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 the other hand,
cities
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 are surfing from a lot of
pollutions
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pollution
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such
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 as air pollution, noise pollution caused by car emissions and traffic
congestions
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congestion
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,
water
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and water
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 pollution from emissions from factories and accommodations.
People
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live
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who live
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 in the
cities
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 have to manage to pay the high cost of living either.
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Further more
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Furthermore
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,
life
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 in
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countryside
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the countryside
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 not only has peaceful places at night
that
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where
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people
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 are easy to relax after school and work all day but
also
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 fresh air and
reasonable
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a reasonable
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 cost of living
that
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so that
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people
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 will not get pressure in
life
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. Meanwhile,
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countryside
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the countryside
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 has
less
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fewer
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 modern facilities for
people
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 to live
.
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in.
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 In conclusion, living in the
cities
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 has more opportunities to get
a quality jobs
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a quality job
quality jobs
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 and there are
also
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 a lot of
services
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 that are convenient for
people
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 to live.
Besides
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,
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countryside
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the countryside
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 is an ideal environment to live comfortably without pressure, it has less modern facilities and
services
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 as well. In my opinion, I would rather
to
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live in the
cities
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due to
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 its advantages and I could easily have a wonderful
life
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 in the future.
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