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some people think cities are the best place to live. others prefer to live in the countryside. discuss both view and give your opinion

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In the modern world, many people have the point of view that
cities
 are the best place to live.
While
 the others do not think that and prefer to live in the countryside.
This
 writer strongly agrees with the second statement and will show both views in
this
 essay. On the one hand, living in the scenery has many advantages. People might be avoided lung diseases because of the fresh air in
this
 place. The amount of vehicles in the countryside is less than in the
cities
, it leads to the clean of the air. Not only that, less transport means the noise pollution is not too much and the citizens can enjoy their peaceful atmosphere.
On the other hand
, living in the
cities
 provides many benefits too. The residents in these
cities
 have many facilities
such
 as
the
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transportation and
the
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modern technology or building. The life quality of
citizen
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 is higher than in the rural area. For, example there
are
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 much more
hospital
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hospitals
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 so people will have more places to
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 their health.
To conclude
, I would rather live in the countryside because of the peace and I can enjoy my life. Maybe down the road, I will choose a rural area to start a home and settle down.
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