IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3

Some people think cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the country side. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

#people #cities #place #country #side
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Some people
argured
Correct your spelling
argued
argue
 that living in metropolises is
a
Change the article
the
show examples
 best place to inhabit,
while
Linking Words
 some others opt to live in rural regions.
This
Linking Words
 essayist will discuss and give some reasons
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
relative to
this
Linking Words
 statement. Living in a metropolis will give more opportunities to access
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
services like banks or hospitals,
for example
Linking Words
, people can easily contact
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
medical services or travel.
Moreover
Linking Words
, Metropolis inhabitants can live a better standard of life, there are lots of amenities in
city
Add an article
the city
a city
show examples
 that serve and improve the people’s lifestyle, entertainment like cinemas
for instance
Linking Words
. Living in a rural region,
where
Correct word choice
which
show examples
 can give inhabitants fresh air and
less
Correct article usage
a less
show examples
 polluted environment, they no need to worry about
suffer
Change the verb form
suffering
show examples
 from diseases including asthma or heart attack. What’s more, there are no congestion in the countryside and
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
traffic accident
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
seem to be lesser, creating a safer place to inhabit in. In conclusion, living in cities will have more amenities and services,
while
Linking Words
 the
country side
Correct your spelling
countryside
show examples
 can provide fresh air and lessly to suffering from pollution,
this
Linking Words
 essay prefers the evidence of living in
metropolis
Add an article
a metropolis
the metropolis
show examples
.
Submitted by [email protected] on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: