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The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people leaving in UK cities in 2008 (%)

The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people leaving in UK cities in 2008 (%)
#people #uk #cities
Some of the most reported living issues among city residents living in major UK
cities
 in 2008 are Health Services, Education and training and
Air
Pollution
. From the list of
cities
, Newcastle, Belfast, Birmingham and
Glasgow
 have the lowest
percentage
 of
air
pollution
 than the other
cities
, it ranging from 0% to 10%, meanwhile Manchester and London
having
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have
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 the highest
air
pollution
percentage
 reaching almost 20%.
In addition
, Belfast and Cardiff are the only
cities
 closest to the 60% mark
Health
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for Health
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 Services, making them the highest in
this
 section and
Glasgow
having
Wrong verb form
has
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 the least amount of
percentage
, approximately 50%. The
last
 sector is
the
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apply
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Education and Training
one
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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. Almost every city in
this
 list like Belfast, London, Cardiff, Birmingham and
Glasgow
, passes the 50% mark, except for two
cities
, Manchester and Newcastle.
However
, there are some similarities in
this
 chart like
Glasgow
 and Birmingham having the same
percentage
 in the
Air
Pollution
 section.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • affordable housing
  • urban areas
  • overcrowding
  • homelessness
  • traffic congestion
  • car ownership
  • public transportation systems
  • commuting times
  • air pollution
  • industrial activities
  • air quality
  • green spaces
  • urbanization
  • mental health
  • crime rates
  • socio-economic factors
  • sense of security
  • waste management
  • waste disposal
  • recycling
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