Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult ,such as sahara desert or the Antarctic Where are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Nowadays, numerous people are visiting
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where the conditions are difficult .It seems they are very happy to
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the
places
to take a challenge to survive over around the areas . In
sahara
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arid or Antarctic yes there
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difficulties in staying but ,
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the advantages and disadvantages in the below paragraph .
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in the Sahara uninhabited
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seems too much of
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climate and it's hard to survive the daily life
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tourists to visit the beauty of nature and
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experience
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these locations. They
also
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to follow their culture and the
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personalities to show to others .In
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shara
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desert they are viewing the sunset and in
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wildlife of penguins and seals.
Additionally
reaching the destination is
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the great
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who
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to travel .It enlarges their confidence level and
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.In the difficult
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they should need the
physcial
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physical
as well as
mental health condition to b followed their sources of travels
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so many disadvantages
also
take place apparently if they are not ready to face the challenges and
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sahara
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desert the
places
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too sunny without adequate
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water the people will suffer from
dehyderation
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the climate is too chill so both
places
are difficult to survive . In conclusion ,visiting the destination place
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has both benefits and disadvantages .
while
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witnessing
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and the wildlife
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has
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dangerous path conditions .
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  • breathtaking landscapes
  • unique ecosystems
  • sense of adventure
  • personal growth
  • indigenous cultures
  • environmental conservation
  • climate change
  • environmental degradation
  • economically disadvantaged areas
  • physical health
  • harsh weather
  • difficult terrain
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