The graph shows average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.

The graph shows average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.
The line graph below demonstrates average annual expenditures on
cell
phone
and residential
phone
services
over a decade, from 2001 to 2010.
Overall
,
cell
phone
services
was
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were
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on
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at
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its
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their
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lowest
point
in the beginning, and
then
showed
rose
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a rose
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,
while
residential
phone
services
illustrated
downward
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a downward
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trend.
Cell
phone
services
was
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were
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on
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apply
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200$ in 2001 and
then
suddenly rose, exceeding
cell
phone
services
in 20006 at the
point
of approximately 550$.
At the end
of the
period
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,period
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the figure showed its highest
point
at 750$. Residential
phone
services
started at 700$ in 2001 and
then
fell steadily until 2006 to reach 550$. In one year period between 2006 and
2007
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,2007
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this
figure showed
rapid
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a rapid
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fall to just under 500$.
Then
the graph dropped gradually to its lowest
point
at 400$ in 2010.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual expenditures
  • cell phone services
  • residential phone services
  • steady increase
  • steady decrease
  • comparison
  • milestones
  • technological advancements
  • trends
  • speculating
  • paraphrasing
  • overview
  • notable changes
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