The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zeeland in 2003 and 2013.

The pie charts below show  the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zeeland in 2003 and 2013.
The given pie charts present the types of services in
online
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the online
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shopping
center
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and
percentage
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the percentage
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of customers in each section in New Zeeland in 2003 and 2013.
Overall
, travel and
clothe
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sections have dropped,
while
mass media,
such
as films, music and book
sales
showed
rise
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. In 2003, travel occupied the biggest portion of
sales
, just over
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the
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third of total
sales
. Clothe and films/music section has approximately the same draws, 24 and 21
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respectively. The less popular sort of product
was books
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was booked
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with 19%. In 2013, there was
not
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no
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big change in proportions. Film and music become domain
type
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types
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of
sales
(33$).
Journey
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The journey
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section occupied 29% of all
sales
. Books and clothes changed only marginally.
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