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The diagram below shows the various stages involved in publishing a book.

The diagram below shows the various stages involved in publishing a book.
#stages #book
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The given diagram presents
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process
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the process
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 of
book
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 publishing.
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, it is a linear
process
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 consisting
nine
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 steps, beginning with writing a
book
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 and ending up with the sales in bookshops.
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process
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 takes between 18 months and 2 years, and
the first step is
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 writing the
book
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. After that,
writer
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 sends it to publishing houses, where editors study it. If
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book
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the book
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exciting
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is exciting
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 and
publishing
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the publishing
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 house
ready
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is ready
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 to print the
book
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,
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an agreement
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 between
writer
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the writer
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 and
publishing
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the publishing
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 house will made.
Subsequently
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,
design
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the design
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 of
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book
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the book
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 invents on the computer. When
design
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the design
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 is created,
final
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the final
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 version of
layout
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the layout
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 approves.
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printing
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the printing
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 machine prints
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book
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the book
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 and after that, lists bind to each other in the eighth step of the
process
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.
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,
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book
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the book
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 is already published and
transports
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 to
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book shops
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bookshops
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 or online markets.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, book with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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