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In the past, photography was used to real people and places; however, because of technology, today you cannot trust what you see. Is it a negative or positive aspect of development?

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It is evident that photography used to depict original pictures, but
due to
 technological enhancements it is hard to accept everything in a
picture
 is real.
Although
 evaluating and trusting the taken photos is a challenge, I believe
this
 improvement helps us have photos with higher quality and even erase unwanted things in pictures. The opposers of
this
 improvement are of the opinion that
this
 could lead to several damages
such
 as making it easy for criminals to fraud identities. One,
for instance
, is able to attach his
picture
 next to someone else's id card and do things that can harm other
people
 or steal from others.
Moreover
, these enhanced applications
such
 as Photoshop which can show you slim and tall
instead
 of fat and short can cause multiple problems.
Additionally
, a person put
this
 fake photo as his profile
picture
 on different platforms and someone gets interested in that fake
picture
.
As a result
, not only does
this
 gives that person fake self-confidence but it
also
 makes another person experience trust issues
due to
 believing what was unreal. In my point of view,
this
 new technology can be beneficial in many aspects. Improvements in
this
 field made it easier to have high-quality photos and
also
people
 are able to make their old pictures more colourful. I remember, by the use of artificial intelligence and Photoshop application I could convert an old black and white photo of my grandparents' wedding into a beautiful and high-quality
picture
last
 year.
Furthermore
, if you have a photo which you really like but you have a problem with
people
 surrounding you or you do not like something in the background you can just erase them or modify them in a way you like. In conclusion,
while
 some individuals do not like technological developments in photography, I am of the opinion that these improvements are helpful and they have made
people
's lives more beautiful.
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