The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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citizens's
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citizens'

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spendings
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spending

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three categories in 2004.
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residents'

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expense ratio
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the culinary sector slightly increased,
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, the percentage of expenditure on
the
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restaurant and hotel services followed a downward trend by
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. The group
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Under 30
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only spent 6% of total revenue on food and drink and
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ratio increased by 17% to approximately 23% in the Above-76-year-old class.
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, the outcome for entertainment facilities
also
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noticable
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noticeable

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upward trend by
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ageing

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,
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and peaked at 23% in the 61-
75 year-old
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75-year-old

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group,
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experienced a drop by 10% in 2004. The remaining spending area was restaurant and hotel payments dropped
slighly
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slightly

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in the older generations. Before inclined by roughly 5% in the age of 76-plus group, hit the bottom at 2% in the 61-75 years old
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citizens

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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