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The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph illustrates the five different age groups of UK
citizens's
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citizens'
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 total
spendings
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spending
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on
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in
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 three categories in 2004.
Overall
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,
residents's
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residents'
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 expense ratio
on
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in
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 the culinary sector slightly increased,
however
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, the percentage of expenditure on
the
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apply
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restaurant and hotel services followed a downward trend by
aging
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ageing
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. The group
of
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apply
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Under 30
was
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only spent 6% of total revenue on food and drink and
this
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 ratio increased by 17% to approximately 23% in the Above-76-year-old class.
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, the outcome for entertainment facilities
also
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 saw
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a noticable
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noticable
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noticeable
 upward trend by
aging
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ageing
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,
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 and peaked at 23% in the 61-
75 year-old
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75-year-old
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 group,
then
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 experienced a drop by 10% in 2004. The remaining spending area was restaurant and hotel payments dropped
slighly
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slightly
 in the older generations. Before inclined by roughly 5% in the age of 76-plus group, hit the bottom at 2% in the 61-75 years old
citizens's
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citizens
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 category.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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