Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that video games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?

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that
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have harmless fun or even useful educational tool. When others think that
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have adverse
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on gamers. In my view, though there could be some advantages
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playing
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, the effect of drawbacks is more obvious
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the
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who play them. On the one hand, there must be some advantages for
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who like playing
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, every person cannot work all the
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without
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with others so they need
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their friends. Playing
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games
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is a convenient and popular way to communicate with friends which can enhance friendship.
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, from
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perspective, some
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show interesting knowledge.
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, there are many
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focusing on history
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game
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players
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can know a
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history or a famous
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people
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life.
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way,
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their
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in an active way and have more enjoyment.
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, I believe that these benefits are outweighed by the drawbacks following.
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people
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need relaxing
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, most of the
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consume
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time
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and energy of players which
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them feel more tired. And the momentary joy
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players addicted
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and spend longer
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on
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than they plan, especially teenagers whose self-control is bad.
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time
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gaming let gamers have no
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or study to improve themselves and even
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damage
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their physical health. Though there are
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or caution on health. Most of the gamers will ignore the notice and continue playing. In conclusion,
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there are positive aspects of
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in relaxation or education, most
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players cannot resist the temptation to be happy and spend more
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in
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and ignore reality.
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