Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that video games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?

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think
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that
video
games
have harmless fun or even useful educational tool. When others think that
video
games
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on gamers. In my view, though there could be some advantages
of
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playing
games
, the effect of drawbacks is more obvious
on
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the
people
who play them. On the one hand, there must be some advantages for
people
who like playing
games
.
Firstly
, every person cannot work all the
time
without
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with others so they need
time
to contact
with
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their friends. Playing
video
games
is a convenient and popular way to communicate with friends which can enhance friendship.
Besides
, from
educational
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perspective, some
games
can
also
show interesting knowledge.
For example
, there are many
games
focusing on history
that
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game
player
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players
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can know a
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history or a famous
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life.
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this
way,
people
can
wide
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their
horizon
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in an active way and have more enjoyment.
On the other hand
, I believe that these benefits are outweighed by the drawbacks following.
Although
people
need relaxing
time
, most of the
games
consume
time
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and energy of players which
make
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them feel more tired. And the momentary joy
let
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players addicted
in
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and spend longer
time
on
games
than they plan, especially teenagers whose self-control is bad.
A long-
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time
gaming let gamers have no
time
work
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or study to improve themselves and even
have
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damage
on
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their physical health. Though there are
limitation
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limitations
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or caution on health. Most of the gamers will ignore the notice and continue playing. In conclusion,
while
there are positive aspects of
video
games
in relaxation or education, most
of
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players cannot resist the temptation to be happy and spend more
time
in
games
and ignore reality.
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