The government should be responsible for providing retirees with financial support and care. While many people think that citizens should save money to take care of themselves when they are old. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Is relying
from
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the
government
far better than saving? Some
people
argued that the
government
should provide financial
support
and care to the
people
who reached their golden age.
This
essay will discuss both views in detail and provide evidence as to why providing financial
support
is not that beneficial in the long run. On the one hand,
money
equates
financial
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security. It is critical that every individual must save their own
money
,
For instance
, you must save whilst still young. As the saying goes, "If you tucked something away, you'll have something to retrieve later."
Additionally
, when you have the means, it boosts your confidence and other
people
will
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you. By saving
money
, you have peace of mind, knowing that you have the means to buy your basic needs and wants.
Moreover
, in case of unexpected circumstances and
emergencies
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you have something to use and not worry
on
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how to survive
this unfortunate events
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.
On the other hand
, the
government
might have the responsibility to provide financial
support
but bear in mind that
this
support
will not get us too far. It will make the
people
lazy and just rely on the
government
.
Moreover
, just waiting and depending on what the
government
will give is not beneficial in the long run. Especially, when said emergencies happen.
Moreover
, the opposite will happen,
people
tend to look down on someone who is financially unstable.
To conclude
, saving and having your own
money
is crucial and will give us the security that we need in our old age
while
only depending on the
government
's
support
is impractical and will lead us
to
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nowhere in the long run.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • government responsibility
  • financial support
  • care
  • retirees
  • personal responsibility
  • retirement planning
  • social security
  • pension
  • benefits
  • concerns
  • dependency
  • adequate savings
  • elderly citizens
  • burden
  • welfare system
  • poverty
  • social safety net
  • financial stability
  • public funds
  • sustainable
  • reliable
  • case study
  • Japan
  • Sweden
  • United States
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