The table below shows the amount of waste production (in millions of tonnes) in six different countries over a twenty-year period.

The table below shows the amount of waste production (in millions of tonnes) in six different countries over a twenty-year period.
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The given table compares the amount of waste which was produced in six different countries from 1980 to 2000.
Overall
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it is clear that
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there was a significant change throughout the period , five of six countries saw an increase and the US dominated in all years.
To begin
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with, in 1980 the
figures
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for Japan were 28
million
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which is seven times bigger than Poland in
this
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year.
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,
this
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year Ireland accounted for only 0.6
million
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and Portugal for 2
million
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,
whereas
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figures
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for the US were far higher 131
million
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. No
figures
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are given for Korea.
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to
this
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, in 1990 Japan and Korea accounted for almost the same 31 and 32
million
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respectively.
However
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, the
figures
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for Poland were 5
million
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and for Portugal 3
million
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,
while
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the US accounted for far bigger 151
million
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.
By contrast
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, in 2000
figures
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for Ireland and Portugal were the same 5
million
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,
while
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this
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year the US accounted for 192
million
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which is roughly ten times bigger than Korea (19
million
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).
Finally
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, the
figures
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for Japan and Poland were 53 and 6.6
million
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respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words figures, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 6 times.
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