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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays,
development
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 of technology might be noticed in various areas which makes people's life easier.
According to
 news and sources
in
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apply
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the Internet company named “SpaceX” already invented
car
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a car
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 called Tesla which
help
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helps
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facilies
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facilities
families
 to drive driverless. It is predicted that
while
 travelling only passengers will be present inside of transport and I believe that there are benefits,
as well as
 drawbacks of these changes. On the one hand, travelling in the near future will be safer.
In other words
, Artificial
intelegent
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intelligent
 do not have
any
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many
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 need as human do.
For instance
,
if
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apply
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during long car
Journeys
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Journey's
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 drivers usually need rest to gain energy to concentrate on the road, in order to not get into car
excidents
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accidents
. In AI
case
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cases
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, they do not have any feelings or things which are usually
relevent
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relevant
 to people. So, it allows them to get to
specific
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a specific
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place
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places
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 without any stops and raises the chance of
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a peacefull
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peacefull
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peaceful
 trip.
Moreover
, travelling might
became
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 more available for
society
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a society
the society
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 which makes them
to
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use
this
 facility more often.
On the other hand
,
increase
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an increase
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 in
frequency
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the frequency
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 of
traveling
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travelling
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have
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has
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negative
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a negative
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 effect on air quality and
environment
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the environment
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. If people start using cars and buses even more frequently, it allow
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the engine
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engine
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engines
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 to burn more fuel which at the same time produces harmful gases,
such
 as carbon monoxide and others. These
gases
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aregases
weregases
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 very reactive with halogens like chlorine which
distroys
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destroys
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer. One of the consequence, of
thin
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a thin
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 ozone layer is that UV lights
are easily enters
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are easily entered
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atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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 and trapped there. Eventually, it causes climate change which all
population
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populations
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scared
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are scared
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from
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of
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.
To sum up
, I believe that
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 outweigh all facilities given
from
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by
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 driverless transport, since they cause serious danger.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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