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The pie chart below represents the percentage of transport and car use in Edminton.

The pie chart below represents the percentage of transport and car use in Edminton.
The pie chart below represents the percentage of transport and
car
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 use in
Edminton
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Edmonton
.
Overall
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, the
car
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 was the most usable vehicle and LRT was more popular among them about 35%than
taxi
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taxis
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 and
bus
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buses
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. As
it
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apply
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is shown from the diagram, almost half of
users
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the users
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 preferred to go by
car
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,
other
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the other
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 two
transport's
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transport
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 usable
it
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apply
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is as much as 10%. There were several reasons why people use the
car
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 in
city
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the city
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, the most common reason was
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the commute
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commute
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commuting
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 to work
it
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apply
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accounted
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accounting
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 for 55%,
while
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 45% use it for
bussiness
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business
 purposes. People who
travels
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travel
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 by
car
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 for shopping and leisure activity contribute
to
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apply
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15%,
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however
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,however
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to take
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taking
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 children to their school was another reason people
travelled
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travel
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 which occupies 40% of total travel.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "represents" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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