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Sample 3.Animal species are becoming extinct due to human activities on land and in the sea. What are the reasons and solutions.

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The various activities by
people
 both on land and
ocean
has
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have
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lead
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led
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 to
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the disappearing
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disappearing
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disappearance
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 of many types of
animals
. In the present year , many individuals prefer materials and supplies like different kinds of
woods
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wood
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 for various
puroposes
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purposes
 directly from
th
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the
 wildlife.
This
 has
lead
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led
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 to
degradation
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the degradation
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 of
forest
area
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areas
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 where individuals tend to manufacture wood from trees . The continuous cutting of trees
lead
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leads
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 to
decrease
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a decrease
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 in the number of trees which made
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it widlife
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widlife
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wildlife
 difficult to survive
on
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in
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 its own habitat.
Construction
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The construction
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 of roads for easy transport through the
forest
 area has decreased the land area for
animals
 to move and live their
life
 . For
exmple
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example
, roads built
among
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in
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 the
forest
has
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have
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 made it difficult for various land
animals
 to travel from one point to another.
This
the
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is the
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 reason why,
people
 see different types of
animals
 during their travel through
forest
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the forest
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.
On the other hand
,
ocean
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the ocean
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 is
also
 degraded equally as forests.
People
temd
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tend
 to dump all their
waste
 products and materials into the
ocean
 which has made
animals
 living in
water
 hard to survive. Individuals who visit beaches have the habit of not
disposing
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ofdisposing
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 their
waste
 products in appropriate bins , rather, they leave
it
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them
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 on the beach ,
that
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which
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 will be gradually moved into the
water
 by various environmental factors.
For example
, the
increase
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increased
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 number of plastics and other non-biodegradable wastes dumped into the
water
 plays
a
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an
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 important role in the extinction of blue whales. The
waste
 products
has
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have
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 made the survival of blue whales difficult,
therby
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thereby
, making it a
water
 species that can be seen only
on
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in
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 books by the upcoming generations. In conclusion, humans and their habit of
waste
 management
places
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place
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 a crucial role in the
maintanence
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maintenance
 and management of wild and
ocean
life
. It has become formidable for different species to live a comfortable
life
 in their own surrounding.
People
 must abate the disposal of wastes into nature
beacuse
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because
 it may
also
 create problems for the survival of human
life
 in the near future. Government can implement various policies and rules that must be followed to prevent
from
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further
 degradation of
widlife
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wildlife
 and other species . As
people
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,people
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 it is all our
responsibilty
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responsibility
 to look after nature and
amed
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amend
 their way of living.
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