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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Other prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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With the rising population of the world, there is a discussion about where is the best place to build a home, in the urban or the rural areas. Though both sentiments
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 the second statement more than the first with the below reason. With the development of technology, living in the outskirts is more and more comfortable. It
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 should be noted that the housing is more affordable than the urban and the opportunity for work is increasing too. Nowadays, investors are focused on under-development areas, so it is can be said that the countryside may have a
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 careers that even more worthwhile than
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 a variety of conveniences, benefits and facilities to ensure the life of
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 inhabitants. But, with the thought of the chance to across a better career or work in
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 is better than in the countryside
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 lots of people
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 into it, making the places more and more crowded. So the convenience that these places provide will never catch up with the demand. So the cost of living will increase on and on causing more inflation. The writer statement prefers the countryside
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 the benefits
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. With the small numbers of factories and traffics so the air quality in the rural areas is way better than
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cities
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 the lack of big business. In conclusion, living in
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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