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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Other prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

#people #cities #place #countryside
Most
of
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people
 believe that it is better to live in
cities
,
whereas
 some
other
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others
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 would like to live far from the
cities
.
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dicuss
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discuss
discusses
 both views and
give
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the writer
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writer
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 opinion.
To begin
, the main reason that
people
 would like to live in
cities
 is that
cities
have
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 more convenient than
countryside
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the countryside
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.
People
, who live in
cities
 know that there are so many
benifit
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benefits
 for their life kike advanced education,
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and mordern
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mordern
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modern
 transport.
Beside
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 that,
cities
 are the places
that
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where
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 the economy
increase
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outstanding
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. So
the
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city life
has
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 more convenient than some
people
live
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who live
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 in
countryside
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the countryside
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.
On the other hand
, moving to the countryside has uncountable advantages that should not be neglected.
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been
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gathered many new supporters in the recent decade because of the new studies and
researches
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 about the human mind and related matters. To illustrate, scientists have been probing the main reasons for
the
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modern human anxiety and realized that the long history of living in crowded
cities
 is the major cause of
this
 phenomenon. In summary, it depends on the lifestyle that a person prefers. Personally, I think it's better to live in a city to make some modifications.
However
, few
people
 spend the time necessary to travel to a remote area and enjoy a tranquil existence.
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