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It is argue by some that animal experiment is not accepted and suppose to be banned, while the others stand on that notion according to the benefits that it might bring. This essay will elaboreted more about both perspective on the following paragraph.

#experiment #notion #perspective #paragraph
Regarding
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experiment matters, using
animal
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animals
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 in a
laboraty
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laboratory
 can be acceptable in order to support the
way
 scientist do their job.
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 can be a tactful
way
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 used for
essential
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 goal and
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 the end will be beneficial for human beings rather than using
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humans
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 directly.
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;
scientist
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scientists
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use
mouse
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 in the laboratory to prove the function of
the
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medicine and how the drugs work to heal some
desease
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disease
diseases
.
As a result
 when experiments
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success
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 it can be applied
on
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 human which is we can consume that medicine without worrying about the effect.
On the other hand
, since we live
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 the cutting edge of the era,
instead
 of using animals people can
use
 robots to support the mission.
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on
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 the military services which
use
dog
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dogs
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 for some
situation
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situations
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 and even
trained
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 the
dog
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dogs
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 to be more skilled and handle the job. Even though sometimes
these dog
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 sometimes
faced
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dificulty
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difficulty
 even
die
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 because they can
assoiciates
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associate
associates
 with the situation.
Thus
 it will be more practical if they can
use
robot
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 to deal with their problem.
To conclude
, the
way
scientist
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scientists
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use
animal
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animals
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 still can
be tolerate
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 as long as they
used
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it
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 in the proper
way
to
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 a
meaningfull
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meaningful
 reason and
also
 it will be far
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more helpfull
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helpfull
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helpful
 when technology can take part and
minimaze
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minimise
 the
use
 of
animal
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animals
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 in
this
 industry.
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