In many modern societies, grandchildren rarely spend any quality time with their grandparents. What do you think are the consequences of this?

Kinship is unquestionably one of the most prevalent and worrying aspects in any society these days. Of course, it is important for children to spend enough
time
with their relatives,
therefore
a lack of communication could definitely bring some negative consequences.
To begin
with, grandparents usually have a lot of experience and knowledge which they could share with others. Undoubtedly, modern children prefer to waste their
time
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playing computer games or watching TV,
while
their parents are not at home. The older generation are more likely to have some spare
time
, so they could explain
young
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people
some essential things. For sure, the development of cognitive functions through learning from other
people
's
experience
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is crucial during the whole childhood,
however
, teenagers often do not appreciate
this
opportunity and refuse it.
Consequently
, they do not expand their horizons and usually underachieve in school.
In addition
to
this
, a lack of quality communication could lead to kinship disappearing. Without a doubt, if a child
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not have a habit of communicating with his extended family, it is extremely difficult for him to keep in touch with these
people
As a consequence
, relationships would be lost
due to
the fact that the young generation simply does not understand the importance of these connections and does not appreciate them.
Moreover
,
people
who have been growing up without warm kinship could experience some difficulties in building close relationships in the future.
For instance
, hundreds of scientific research have already shown that children who rarely spend any quality
time
with their grandparents are more likely to grow rude and introverted.
To conclude
, nowadays offspring do not use an opportunity to have a dialogue with their grandparent. Unfortunately, it is a negative development which could eventually lead to some learning difficulties or relationships disappearing.
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