Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people argue that university
students
wish to study many kinds of subjects.
However
, Others say that
students
should study for a
qualification
. I strongly believe that both studying
methods
are
same
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rate very important. When it comes to aimed
qualification
studying, the
students
who only spend time studying for a
qualification
have more chances of getting a
job
. Because
,
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they were already proved by
qualification
examination. The
students
will be professional employees
such
as doctors, lawyers and accountants. They
have
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not wide knowledge but deep knowledge.
Also
, a lot of
students
hope to learn several subjects. They have many reasons. Among them one reason,
that
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in the future, they will get a
job
which would choice range widely.
Also
, they are going to be more useful employees of many different
job
categories.
For example
, some
students
have the main subject of computer development. if they study design too. When they make an APP or WEB service in the company, they can work on all steps from design to development. Many companies want the already employees. In conclusion, the two studying
methods
both are good ways to get a
job
after university graduation. Someone wants several knowledge.
Also
, someone needs a
qualification
. The way
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students
choice
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the
methods
should be different from their aim. If they want to be
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content creators, they would study too many subjects. And, if they want to be a doctor, they would study for a
qualification
. So, the studying
methods
are not good or good.
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