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Some people think that cities are the best place other prefer to live in a rural area. Compare the advantages and disadvantages

#people #cities #place #area
The advantage of
this
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 best
place
 to live. Many people believe that living in the
city
 is a
good
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place
 than living in the countryside. I personally agree with
this
 view for the following reasons. There are many reasons why many people believe that the
city
 is a better
place
 to live.
This
 is primarily because urban areas offer a great number of opportunities. Cites are the places where business activities are concentrated the most. All the world's big companies gather together in population cities and have great growth potential in the future.
For instance
, Ha Noi and Ho Chi Minh
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 are the largest cities in Viet Nam and have the highest rate of employment. The most modern countries could attract big investments and big companies, which could help to develop
further
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each country's wealth. Another reason is that there will be better quality of life in cities, especially in education and healthcare. To show an example, there are some large and well-known hospitals in Viet Nam
such
 as Vinmec
hospital
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 in Ho Chi Minh
city
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 or Bach Mai
hospital
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 in Ha Noi capital. The hospitals have the most modern facilities and the best doctors. At the same time, these
place
 has very famous and great
universites
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universities
 where everyone's children will have the
opportunites
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opportunity
 to go to schools, providing a huge amount of knowledge and skills related to the jobs that they choose in the future.
Therefore
, living in urban will have sufficient tools and facilities. In conclusion, the
city
 is a nicer
place
 to live than the countryside, and I argue that the
city
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 in many ways.

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