Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

In recent times,

children

tend to devote prolonged hours to their

smartphones

everyday

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. In my perspective, there are several factors which result in

this

phenomenon and the act of abusing

smartphones

in

children

may develop negative impacts in the long term.

Firstly

, as social media are spreading rapidly

as well as

those entertainment platforms are being upgraded to be more ubiquitous to the public, numerous apps with attractive designs have been invented to serve

human’s

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entertaining

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purposes.

As a consequence

,

children

can simply get access to the digital environment

as well as

online games, where they are likely to be impressed by the appealing designs of these platforms,

hence

they will have

higher

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probability of being addicted to

smartphones

or more specifically

being indulge

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in playing games.

Moreover

, the lack of parental supervision may

also

be the primary factor. As

children

are not aware of curbing their playing times,

as well as

their cognition about the harm of misusing

smartphones

, they will continue their progress on the phones if parental interruption is not involved.

This

phenomenon will spark severe consequences

on

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children

in several aspects.

Firstly

, abusing

smartphones

is hazardous to their eyesight as they are exposed to harmful rays derived from the phone screen, in the long term it even leads to some detrimental

disease

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not only related to optic health but

also

their entire body.

Furthermore

, misusing

smartphones

will hinder

children

from taking part in social activities or socializing with their loved ones and friends.

Thus

they will have a higher probability of sustaining from depression or mental issues

as a result

of the lack of interacting with the outer environment. In conclusion,

this

phenomenon is getting more and more severe, with many factors which contribute to

this

situation. Considering those aforementioned consequences, some actions should be taken to alleviate the problems.