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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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In recent times,
children
 tend to devote prolonged hours to their
smartphones
everyday
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. In my perspective, there are several factors which result in
this
 phenomenon and the act of abusing
smartphones
 in
children
 may develop negative impacts in the long term.
Firstly
, as social media are spreading rapidly
as well as
 those entertainment platforms are being upgraded to be more ubiquitous to the public, numerous apps with attractive designs have been invented to serve
human’s
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entertaining
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 purposes.
As a consequence
,
children
 can simply get access to the digital environment
as well as
 online games, where they are likely to be impressed by the appealing designs of these platforms,
hence
 they will have
higher
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 probability of being addicted to
smartphones
 or more specifically
being indulge
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 in playing games.
Moreover
, the lack of parental supervision may
also
 be the primary factor. As
children
 are not aware of curbing their playing times,
as well as
 their cognition about the harm of misusing
smartphones
, they will continue their progress on the phones if parental interruption is not involved.
This
 phenomenon will spark severe consequences
on
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children
 in several aspects.
Firstly
, abusing
smartphones
 is hazardous to their eyesight as they are exposed to harmful rays derived from the phone screen, in the long term it even leads to some detrimental
disease
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 not only related to optic health but
also
 their entire body.
Furthermore
, misusing
smartphones
 will hinder
children
 from taking part in social activities or socializing with their loved ones and friends.
Thus
 they will have a higher probability of sustaining from depression or mental issues
as a result
 of the lack of interacting with the outer environment. In conclusion,
this
 phenomenon is getting more and more severe, with many factors which contribute to
this
 situation. Considering those aforementioned consequences, some actions should be taken to alleviate the problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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