Some people believe using modern technology (digital photographs, blogs) is the best way to record and remember important personal events. Others think the traditional method (making photo albums, writing diaries) is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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With today's development of technology the idea of capturing your life through so you can remember it has become quite popular. On the other side, some argue that the old approach is the
way
to go. I believe both of the above written have their pros and cons. On one hand, we all have our phones in our pockets, which makes it easier than ever to take a photo that will
last
forever. Even more so, never before had it been so easy to share your experiences with others, which now takes no more than a few seconds and clicks.
Therefore
going back to those memories is
also
less of a struggle.
On the other hand
, we all in a
way
feel the pressure to post on social media just so we do not feel left behind.
This
of course is leading to oversharing because people
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not only the
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influencers but
also
just regular people feel obligated to share their whole lives on the Internet both the good and the bad, which in no
way
is something good. On the other side, keeping a journal has proven to have many benefits for the person doing it
due to
the fact the person physically writes down their thoughts and feelings, something pictures cannot capture. Better memory and less negative emotions are just some of the examples. Journaling is
way
more personal because it is not for the
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to see, it is only for the one writing.
This
, of course, means showing others is harder. Printing photos even today is still expensive and
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and still someone has to take these photos if not with a phone
then
with a camera. In conclusion, today we feel the effect of social media that everyone wants to take a picture as quickly as possible to show to the world and
while
having a diary is more intimate, it means that sometimes showing others your doings will be just a little bit harder.
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