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the line graph shows the wheat export of canada , austarlia and european countries

the line graph shows the wheat export of canada , austarlia and european countries
The line graph illustrates changes in
wheat
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 export by Australia,
Canada
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, and the European Community within a five-year
period
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 - from 1985 to 1990.
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that
wheat
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 exports by the European Community increased over the
period
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,
whereas
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 Australia witnessed a gradual decrease in the
period
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 considered.
Although
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wheat
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 exports of the three areas fluctuated,
Canada
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 had the highest oscillations throughout the interim. One of the first things to note is that
Canada
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 was the country whose
wheat
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 exportation comprised nearly 20 million
tons
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 in 1985. In the following year, the rate of export fell and
then
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 quickly recovered reaching a peak of 25 million
tons
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 in 1988.
However
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,
this
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 figure fluctuated over the years, finishing surprisingly the same as it was at the starting point. European Community
initially
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 exported less than
Canada
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, but its outcome turned out more than the other two countries at the final point- over 20
tons
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.
In contrast
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 to the other two areas, Australia exported 15
tons
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 in 1985 and saw a slight decrease over the
period
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 except in 1986.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, canada, period, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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