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The charts show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world

The charts show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world
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The pie charts below display the data on
water
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consumption
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 by six different regions of the world. From the available data, it is obvious that most of the
water
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 is used for agricultural
purposes
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,
while
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 the least of the
water
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 is used for domestic
purposes
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. Considering the analytics for agriculture and domestic
consumption
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 of
water
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, the data shows that most of the
water
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 is used by plantations all over as compared to
water
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 used for household and Industrial
purposes
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. Among the given regions, Central
Asia
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 used most of the
water
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 in the field 88%,
while
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 Europe used the least
water
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 in
this
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 category 32%.
Similarly
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, Africa comes second South East
Asia
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 comes third and
then
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 North
America
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 with
water
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consumption
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 percentages are 84%,81% and 39% respectively.
In addition
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, Central
Asia
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 consumed the lowest percentage of
water
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 domestically at 7%,
while
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 South
America
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 is at the top of the list in
this
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 category with a
water
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consumption
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 percentage of 19%. About the third group which is
water
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 usage for industrial
purposes
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 in six regions of the world, given charts show that Europe consumes 53% of
water
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 to
fulfill
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fulfil
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 its industrial requirement,
while
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 Central
Asia
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 only uses 5% for
this
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 purpose.
Furthermore
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, North
America
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, East
Asia
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, South
America
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 and Africa consume 48%,12%,10%, and 7% of
water
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 for industrial use.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, consumption, purposes, asia, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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