Currently, there is a trend towards the use of alternative form of medicine. However, at best these methods are ineffective, and at worst they maybe dangerous. To what extent do you agree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

Some people who have health problems believe that some untested
methods
such
as tea, massage, and medicinal herbs can treat their diseases
instead
of modern medical science. I partially agree that that way it helps to reduce their pain and give hope, but it is a fact that there are no other treatments than treating them at the hospital. People who are
patients
believe that there are many different
methods
to treat their diseases, like rare herbs and special massages. In fact, there are some people who
treated
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problems with special
methods
and
then
disappeared
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,
such
as
cancle
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cancer
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.
For example
, a person who used their own way to treat
cancle
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cancer
treated himself by eating
korean
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vagetables
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vegetables
vegetable
food. Some researchers argue that it helps
patients
have strong beliefs and hope, which reduces their stress and can trick their
brain
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.
As a result
, few
patients
could recover their health again.
On the other hand
, most
patients
need real
medicine's
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treatment
methods
. Because there has been no proven way to recover
patients
by using tea and massage until now, some
patients
have had results like
dealth
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death
.
For instance
, my aunt had
a
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serious cancer, but she got treatment from Chinese medicine
instead
of a hospital, and she passed away after 3 months because the herbal medicine was not fit for her condition and body. In conclusion, many
patients
want to try various
methods
in order to recover their health;
however
, I believe that we need to think more logically before we can get a treatment
that is
proven in a hospital.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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