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The pie charts have shown the percentage of the number of residents between Yemen and Italy in three groups in 2000 and the projection for 2050.

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In Yemen, the
population
 in the youngest age
group
, 0-14
years
 old, accounted for over 50% of the total
population
 of the country in the year 2000, and
this
 proportion is expected to decrease by the year 2050.
Whereas
, in Italy, the number of people in the age
group
 above 60
years
 old is projected to nearly double by the year 2050. The young
population
group
 in Yemen, aged 0-14
years
 old, is projected to decrease from 50.1% to 37% in 50
years
,
while
 the middle-aged
population
group
, 15-59
years
 old, is expected to increase from 46.3% to 57.3%. Meanwhile, the elderly
population
group
 above 60
years
 old is anticipated a slight increase and maintain the lowest proportion on the pie chart throughout the 50-year period. The oldest
population
group
 in Italy, aged above 60
years
 old, is trending towards doubling in 50
years
, increasing from 24.1% to 42.3%, and the middle-aged
population
group
, 15-59
years
 old, is projected to decrease from 61.6% to 46.2%.
Finally
, the youngest age
group
, aged 0-14
years
 old, is expected to slightly decline from 14.3% to 11.5%, and it will hold the lowest proportion in Italy's
population
 chart.
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