The line charts gives information about business and engineered students after six months of their graduation within two years.
The line charts give information about business and engineering students
after
six months of their Change preposition
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graduation
within two years
.
It is clear that
after one
year
of graduation
, about 62% of business department graduates were
found jobs. Unnecessary verb
apply
Furthermore
, after a couple of years
, this
rate
increased approximately by 3%. While
,
about 27% studied Remove the comma
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one
year
later and this
rate
was
decreased by 2% Unnecessary verb
apply
for
the Change preposition
apply
year
later. Additionally
, small numbers of them were seeking jobs.
Regarding the engineered graduation
, the rate
of employment increased by 10% compared to business graduation
after one
and two years
of graduation
. However
, the lowest number of them were time out and the rate
of seeking for job went up to 10% after one
year
and nearly 11% after two years
.
Overall
, most of the graduations were employed in both graduations and least amonut
seeking for job and Correct your spelling
amount
tim
out.Correct your spelling
time
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