Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Therapies have thousands of
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. The most common way is
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to see a
doctor
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professional treatment but now more
people
choose to trust some
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traditional
treatment or buy some
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medicines
medicine
that sell on the
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. For me, I think if you feel uncomfortable it is better to see a
doctor
rather than being
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own
doctor
. Right now,
internet
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is
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convenient
convention
everywhere you can easy to see
people
sell
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medicines
that have
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exaggerated
exaggerate
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labels
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like "
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you eat
this
all the
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will be
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",
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more than 30 days you will decrease 20kg" on
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social media. And these
medicines
often have
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example that
help
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you to trust the benefit of
medicines
. When you are thirsty
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recover
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then
you will buy it even
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if you
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don't know the
origion
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origin
of these
medicines
. I don't
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easily
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trust the medicine
sell
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sold
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on social media I think if everyone
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this
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get
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recover
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then
why
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still
have
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people
get
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getting
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sick
.
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, if someone
tell
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you that you just have to play the game and you can make lots of money.
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thinks
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very
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easy thing if
eveyone
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everyone
try
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tried
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it
then
now
it
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shouldn't
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wouldn't
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have
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be
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any poor
people
.
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sounds
very
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redicuious
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ridiculous
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thing but stills
have
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lots
people
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of people
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want
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who want
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to try it like
buy
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buying
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the
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medicine on the internet. I think
this
is a negative development
people
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People
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should stop trying alternative medicine or treatment they should go to see a
doctor
inmmedicatly
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immediately
to get more professional therapy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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