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The world has become a safer place than it was hundred years ago and the government should stop large amounts on the arm forces. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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People
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 in some
country
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countries are
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 still
running
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living
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 their
life
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lives
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 as slaves recently, we
could
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can
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 see the Manipur issue.
wolr
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WOLR
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 is
ocuupied
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up
 more than 500 crore
people
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to
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 save them
government
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 is taking many actions,
similarly
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 spending
money
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 on the
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arm
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forces
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 to the military officials.
Arm
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forces
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 will
be take
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be taken
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 care of us from the terrorists, here the point is spending more
money
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 on purchasing the
arm
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equipements
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equipment
. In my point of opinion, I would strongly disagree
the
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above mentioned
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 statement that spending more
money
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 on the armed
forces
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 is not good and safe, let us discuss in brief
about
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apply
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the same. In today's
world
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 not only
government
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 is taking care
and
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of and
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 saving the
people
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,
I
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but I
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will
strong
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strongly
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 add that
human's
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humans
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 are taking care of themselves with the help of
the
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apply
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new
ideas
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 and
scientifical
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scientific
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 research methods. nearly
world
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 is identifying nearly 1lakhs and more scientists a day means their
ideas
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is
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are
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 giving more confidence and
awarness
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awareness
 to the nation.
so
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 here
money
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 doesn't play
the
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a
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 major role power of human educational knowledge remains
same
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the same
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 and constant, I would recommend that
spending
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by spending
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money
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onto
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on
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 machines or
equipements
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equipment
,
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government
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the government
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 can offer the budget for inventing new plans and
ideas
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 to scientists to keep our country safe from the upcoming negative impacts by their innovations.
we
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 all know Abdul
kalam
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 is the one who came up with only by educational brain not
by
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apply
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money
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 or something.
plently
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Plenty
 of humans can
also
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 follow the same as
like
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APJ
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ideas
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 on the nation.
on
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 the
same
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other
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 on investing
money
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onto
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in
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 the
Arm
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 gadgets can save just a
specify
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specific
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country
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country's
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people
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 but
similarly
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 pour some
money
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 to the poor
people
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those
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who died in the war, crowd and so
in
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on in
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 many negative eras. for, example
today
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today's
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 talk
of
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apply
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headline is ISRO launched Chandrayaan 3
in
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on
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 the moon, the purpose of the machine is
too
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to
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 check whether
source
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the source
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 of water is
avilable
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available
 or not.
mission
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the mission
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 is
sucessfull
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successful
 only because of the
persons
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person's
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 idea and technical skill not just
a
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the
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help
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heap
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 of
money
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,
meanwhile
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,meanwhile
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 the whole operation
budger
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budget
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 is 250 crore owing to that Russia has launched the Ruffel
its
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apply
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cost of 500
crore
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, I would
recommeding
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recommending
recommend
 that please spend
money
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 to the humans and
people
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 in the
world
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 not to
belive
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believe
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 the machine.
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, though spending much more
money
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in
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on
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 Military, Aircrafts etc.
People
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 should think nothing can change before their
ideas
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 could bring over to the
world
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, as I said before they should
belive
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believe
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 them
while
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 preparing to
acheive
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achieve
 their
goal
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goals
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 for,
example
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the example
an example
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 we all know who is Klapana
chawla
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Chawla
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 anyone knows the name of
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an indian
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indian
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Indian
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person
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person's
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 child
praghya
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Praghya
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 he is famous chess player he came up with very poor family
,
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 since he is playing with
france
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France
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 chess topper in final and he won, does the kid come up with
support
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the support
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 of
money
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 only knowledge and will power brought that village guy to
final
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the final
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 competition.
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concluding
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 that men and women
needs
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need
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 to have a mutual understanding among themselves and they should have trust
on
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in
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 their skills
not
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and not
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to
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go with
money
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 often. so I will be requesting our
government
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that
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apply
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to spend
money
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 on
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arm
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armed
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forces
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 but meanwhile split the
money
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 and share the investment in some other departments with
help
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the help
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 of good experts and their
ideas
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.

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