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The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in popularity of areas such as fashion and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree?

#tendency #beings #copy #popularity #areas #fashion #consumer #goods
The behaviour of
community
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communities
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 to copy
one
 another is
dominated
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 especially in
fields
 that are used in their daily life
such
 as fashion and food.I completely with
this
 statement as
people
born
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love to copy another thing or
one
 , they prefer to have
one
 who guides them, and
this
 behaviour opens plenty of
fields
 in the society. Copying another
one
 is a natural
behviour
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behaviour
 in human beings .
For instance
, children want to buy
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a
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the
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a
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 toy
that is
 similar to
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their
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his
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their
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friend's
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friend
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 toy .
Therefore
, it is a natural
aduituied
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audited
admitted
 so it is easy to be reflected on
peoples
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people's
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choice
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choices
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 in eating and fashion. The companies are
a ware
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aware
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 of
this
behivour
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behaviour
 so they work on increasing their income by making
advertivsities
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adversities
to
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for
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 their commodities by using popular
people
such
 as
blogers
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bloggers
 on
Instgram
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Instagram
.To explain , in modern days there are many
blogers
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bloggers
such
 as
chiness
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Chinese
bloger
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blogger
bloggers
 who reflect their culture of clothes to youth. Copying
now days
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nowadays
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 becomes easier by using social media as now
one
 doesn't use it .
As well as
,
this
behivour
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behaviour
 of
individual
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individuals
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 opens plenty of
fields
 for
people
 to work
on
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in
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it
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apply
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like marketing,
Restuarants
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Restaurants
 and clothes
shop
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shops
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. To illustrate, In
Egypt
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,Egypt
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 there are many
people
 who
Choses
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choose
, to be bloggers
for
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to
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advirtising
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advertising
 food. They go to
Resturants
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restaurants
 and show to youth how it is so perty
then
youth
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the youth
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went
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go
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 to try
this restaurants
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this restaurant
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.
hence
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, working on
peoples
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people's
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 popularity to increase
Compainces
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company
 profits
is
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 proved his Success. • In
Conculsion
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Conclusion
, I believe that
people
's popularity can open doors to plenty of
fields
 like Marketing restaurants and it is easy to Copy popular
people
 on the things that non popular and popular use
it
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apply
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in their daily life as, food and clothes.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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