Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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people
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too many choices for their aim in the future for
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when they must go to
working
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or
choice
of university and other.
However
some
people
there is only one
choice
because they have
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about
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with
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expenses. In the following paragraph, both views
of
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this
topic will be discussed in detail. From the essay, if we talk about many families or
people
, who have good standing, they will
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choice
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choices
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in their
life
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such
as when they study in
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school, they will study in good schools because they have money
for
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to
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pay expensive term fees.
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they have a special education same.
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this
will give them a lot of
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choices
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than some
people
. So when they have a lot of
choice
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will be good for them in the future.
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, there are many
people
, who have
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few
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money
due to
they are poor. In my
opinion
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I disagree with
this
statement because l
though
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thought
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everyone should get many
choice
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choices
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the same,
which
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and
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the government should
to
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have good management in
them
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the
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country
such
as the government should be given to them in terms of work and education.
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most
people
,
they
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are poor but there
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some
people
,which they have aim for their dreams so many
people
succeed even though they
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have few
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options. In summary, both views there are different
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infrastructures
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in own life,
which
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some families are wealthy and
other
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others
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are poor. So they have different
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choices
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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