The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year,2016.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year,2016.
The pie chart given below represents the amount of funds spent and received by a children's charity in one year,which is located in the USA. It shows two charts ,the first one is revenue and the second one is expenditure, of the children's charity in the year 2016.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • donations
  • grants
  • fundraising events
  • expenditure
  • administration costs
  • program expenses
  • direct benefits
  • indirect benefits
  • underprivileged children
  • education
  • healthcare
  • shelter
  • nourishment
  • medical treatments
  • basic needs
  • financial sustainability
  • transparency
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