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Writing task 1 The diagram below shows the product life-cycle of the car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Writing task 1 The diagram below shows the product life-cycle of the car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied diagram illustrates the product life-cycle of the
car
.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that the whole process includes
the
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mining materials to recycling a
car
. First of all, raw materials required for
vehicle
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vehicles
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 are mined and formed into components. It
then
 is delivered to factories, where the
car
manifacturing
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manufacturing
 process happens.
Next
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The next
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 step contains dealerships
which
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that
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 contribute to
car
sale
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sales
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.
Furthermore
, the product will have 3 owners on average.
Subsequently
, it is repaired and serviced. It is interesting to note that after using cars, they are sold and their materials and parts are recycled. Despite the fact that there are
urecyclable
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recyclable
unrecyclable
 parts, renewed ones are composed into new components, which promotes
to
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the repetition of
mechanism
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the mechanism
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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